Our learning goals are to:
-write a description using powerful words and phrases
include some Te Reo Maori
Carefully check that our sentences make sense and have correct punctuation and spelling
Choose one of the above images to prompt a piece of descriptive writing
Abandoned City
One day me and TEAM ZOMBS went looking for survivors after the big war. We got dropped/ngahoro off out of the biggest helicopter in the world by Joe who is one of the ZOMBS TEAM members. Me and James went looking for survivors. We got loaded with guns. I got a flamethrower and James got a MINIGUN.
I heard something as we were walking through the city and I was like, “Did you hear that James?” He said, “No.” Then he got shot in the leg! I went running/whakaomaoma to him. And I gave him bandages to wrap around his leg. Then we heard gunshots. Me and James went to have a closer look and there were two teams fighting. Then me and James were hiding in the trees until the fight was over. Once it was over we went back to the abandoned city. There were cobwebs everywhere. I could smell the wet soggy dirt and wild peacocks which roaming around. I could also smell the wet soggy moss on the trees and on the side of the building.
While I was searching the abandoned city all I could see was broken windows. There were cobwebs in the corners and on the windows. It felt paranormal. I could hear the peacocks screaming in the night. I could hear the birds and all the other animals tweeting and growling. We could not find any survivors so we went back home. By Cooper
Hi Cooper
ReplyDeleteI liked seeing the idea for a story that you boys came up with from looking at this image. It suits the idea of an abandoned city. When I worked with you the main thing you needed some help with was your punctuation and reminding to make sure you stuck to the goal of having some descriptive language in your writing. I was really happy with the descriptive language you thought of like, " Once it was over we went back to the abandoned city. There were cobwebs everywhere. I could smell the wet soggy dirt and wild peacocks which roaming around. I could also smell the wet soggy moss on the trees and on the side of the building."
Well done.